Rose
"While sitting on the grimy carpet, she thought about the wad of bills stashed behind her socks and underwear. She imagined it like a living animal, expanding week by week. Until one day, it would be big enough that she could move the hell out of the Foxberry."
- What new insights, information, development from blog 1 to blog 2?
- Identify conflicts/tension and has it developed?
- Two questions you ask this character if you sat and had coffee with him/her.
- Suggest something for the next blog.
‘Rose used to spend hours bent over the giant pages of "A Guide to the Wildflowers of South Carolina." She would memorize the names, find the flowers in her backyard, and press them into the book. However, she hadn't even thought about flowers since the move.’
Rose has a passion for botany.
"Okay, so then why did you insist on meeting me here?" said Rose, who was far more interested in the flowers than in her conversation, "I already had the police questioning me this week."
"Let's not mess around sweetie. I know you... worked with Evans. And I know you have information about it. The only thing I don't your is who you really are, Rose, if that's even your real name!"
Rose and the person she is meeting with seem to have conflict as the person she is meeting is demanding information from her. Also rose doesn’t seem to comfortable meeting this person where they met.
“If you could live anywhere else in the entire world besides the Foxberry, where would you go?”
“What led you to come to the Foxberry, there are a million places you could go in the world, why did you settle here?”
Both blogs have a lot of mystery which can be a good thing, but in the next blog, maybe throw the reader a bone / reveal one of Rose’s many mysteries so the reader feels rewarded and is less confused
Frankie:
"I stood in the rain with six mourners staring at a smudged picture of Mr. Evans. As the ink ran down the soaked picture of Evans, it almost looked like he was crying. Not at being dead; in that moment, death seemed like a welcomed alternative. No, I imagined him crying at the sad crowd that stood at his vigil."
"I stood in the rain with six mourners staring at a smudged picture of Mr. Evans. As the ink ran down the soaked picture of Evans, it almost looked like he was crying. Not at being dead; in that moment, death seemed like a welcomed alternative. No, I imagined him crying at the sad crowd that stood at his vigil."
"I get it mom. My life didn't work out exactly how you planned it. Can I just try to figure it out on my own?"
- "I don't know honey. Can you?"For once I stormed out before the argument got too heated.
- What new insights, information, development from blog 1 to blog 2?
The reader gets some information about Frankie’s job at the cutlery museum, and we learn Frankie is about to be questioned about Mr. Evans murder.- Identify conflicts/tension and has it developed?
Most days, I just let the kids sneak in the back and light up in the spork section, but today is not one of those days. This morning left me in no mood for bullshit.- Here you can see conflict as frankie on a daily bases let the kids go in the back and smoke but for some reason frankie is not allowing them to do that today causing conflict between the two.
- Two questions you ask this character if you sat and had coffee with him/her.
“Plastic versus metal versus bamboo for cutlery?”“If you could go live anywhere else, where would you go?”- Suggest something for the next blog.
Maintain the tone, it reveals tons about your character and is really interesting
- I posted this on Evelyn's blog "As I suggested to Bret, your manager, you guys need to chat. Either you, Frankie or Bret needs to find a bloodied knife (or knives) and you've all got to figure out what to do next."
Jackie
"As Jackie was eating her breakfast, she picked up the daily newspaper off her doormat that began mysteriously arriving every morning for the past couple of months. She believes it is from a guy who lives in the apartment a couple of floors up but has not caught him in the act; she still needs to do more detective work and does not have the courage to ask him."
"As Jackie was eating her breakfast, she picked up the daily newspaper off her doormat that began mysteriously arriving every morning for the past couple of months. She believes it is from a guy who lives in the apartment a couple of floors up but has not caught him in the act; she still needs to do more detective work and does not have the courage to ask him."
"I need a favor." her mother said nervously.
- "For what? I needed a favor from you for the past ten years but where have you been..? All you ever did was hurt me!"
- What new insights, information, development from blog 1 to blog 2?
Jackie’s mother comes to town, who she doesn’t like.- Identify conflicts/tension and has it developed?
Jackie then thought to herself, "I deserve a little break. Just one glass of wine is okay. It will help me relax." Even though it was 11 am- Jackie has conflict with drinking a glass of wine when it’s this early in the morning. 11 am isn’t really a “time to drink”
- Two questions you ask this character if you sat and had coffee with him/her.
“Do you actually like reading the newspaper? There are some people that get the newspaper but don’t read it and others actually read it, which are you?”“Because of your teaching job, has you opinion of young people changed? Are they really the future?”- Suggest something for the next blog.
Try to maintain the tense in the story, maybe provide more details or imagery to engage the readers
Elwood
" 'I was here” the phrase read. He found it pointless to carve such a phrase into the ceiling without a signature. “George was here” or “Harry was here” would’ve been more appropriate. His brain anagrammed the words to “Where as I” and “I saw here”, and a couple other phrases which made no sense."
" 'I was here” the phrase read. He found it pointless to carve such a phrase into the ceiling without a signature. “George was here” or “Harry was here” would’ve been more appropriate. His brain anagrammed the words to “Where as I” and “I saw here”, and a couple other phrases which made no sense."
“It sat in the back of his brain, spoiled and soaked in regrets and horror. It was the one name that Elwood could never bring himself to say. It was the name of his one great failure.”
- What new insights, information, development from blog 1 to blog 2?
Elwood hates chess. New character, Lyra, introduced.- Identify conflicts/tension and has it developed?
Two nights after Halloween, Elwood sat at a table in the park, watching Dorothy Rose lose a game of chess to Mr.Jenkins. Dorothy chatted on about the mysterious murder of Mr. Evens, while he nodded along with the conversation. He tried to look interested in the game, but he wasn't. In fact, he wouldn't be watching the game at all if there weren't nosy policeman around asking questions about Mr. Evens.- Tension arises here as he is not really focused on the game, but on the mr.evens situation and story.
- Two questions you ask this character if you sat and had coffee with him/her.
- Suggest something for the next blog.
Keep up the description, maybe reveal more about his condundrum (why is he going to die)
Commonalities:
None of them are happy
They all hate living in the Foxberry
They’re all young
All have a job
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